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lealanulle
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Je suis en Terminale et je prépare mon oral d'anglais, je trouve que certaines phrases de ma synthèse sur "Idea of progress" sont trop compliquées pour un oral mais je ne sait pas comment les reformuler, et je suppose que j'ai fait un certain nombre de faute. Pourriez vous me les corriger et me dire ce qui ne convient pas? Merci Idea of progress I'm going to talk about the notion "Idea of progess". The progress is an evolution, an innovation. It is considered like the way to evolve and upgrade an object or technology. It is supposed to make people live in a better life but we can wonder if the progress always improves our life. Firstly I will deal with the scientific progress, and in a second part, I will talk about the technological progress and its role in the social progress. I have studied “Design your baby” which consist in creating an embryos with PGD, which is the Pré-implantation Genetics Diagnosis. This technology is a good thing for parents who can't have children and it can save a first sick child. Indeed, I have studied the Adam's history. Adam is a baby who was born thanks to PGD, and he had saved his sister with a transplant. So, this example shows a positve aspect of progress. But this innovation had been created to choose the personality of the children. So, parents can choose all characteristics of their child, to have a perfect baby. However, if all parents had selected their baby, nobody would be unique because everybody would be intelligent or beautiful, we would be the same. So, this innovation is dehumanizing. I think this evolution can't help people to have a better life. Robotics, science, technology and biology allow progress. Indeed, novel technologies appeared as mobile phones or robots which are increasingly sophisticated. Robots are more and more smart, in the futur, maybe they can equal the men. The consumption is different in the today's world, because all of people buy a mobile phone, and their consumption is more important because of innovation. Indeed, there are novel products. I have studied the case of a shopaholic, it is a person who has need to buy things, this addiction prevent from having relations. The mobile phone is an outstanding innovation, for example, it allow to people to have a contact with their friends who are far away of them. But it can be a factor of a lack of communication. Indeed, I have seen a short movie with Kirsten Dunst where two girls had taken a photo with the celebrity but they hadn't spoke with she. To conclude, innovations can helped in the medical progress but we should not go too far if we want the progress continue to be a help for a better life. Moreover, innovation in technologies can be a good thing but it can be a factor of relationship breakdown. So, I think the progress don't always improve our life.

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I'm going to talk about the notion “Idea of progress”. The progress is an evolution, an innovation. It is considered like the way to evolve and upgrade an object or technology. It is supposed to make people live in a better life but we can wonder if the progress always improves our life. Firstly I will deal with the scientific progress, and in a second part, I will talk about the technological progress and its role in the social progress. I have studied “Design your baby” which consist in creating an embryo with PGD, which is the Pré-implantation Genetics Diagnosis. This technology is a good thing for parents who can't have children and it can save a first sick child. Indeed, I have studied the Adam's history. Adam is a baby who was born thanks to PGD, and he had saved his sister with a transplant. So, this example shows a positive aspect of progress. But this innovation had been created to choose the personality of the children. So, parents can choose all characteristics of their child, to have a perfect baby. However, if all parents had selected their baby, nobody would be unique because everybody would be intelligent or beautiful, we would be the same. So, this innovation is dehumanizing. I think this evolution can't help people to have a better life. Robotics, science, technology and biology allow progress. Indeed, novel technologies appeared as mobile phones or robots which are increasingly sophisticated. Robots are more and more smart, in the future, maybe they can equal the men. The consumption is different in the today's world, because all of people buy a mobile phone, and their consumption is more important because of innovation. Indeed, there are novel products. I have studied the case of a shopaholic, it is a person who has need to buy things, this addiction prevent from having relations. The mobile phone is an outstanding innovation, for example, it allows peopling to have a contact with their friends who are far away of them. But it can be a factor of a lack of communication. Indeed, I have seen a short movie with Kirsten Dust where two girls had taken a photo with the celebrity but they hadn't spoken with she. To conclude, innovations can helped in the medical progress but we should not go too far if we want the progress continue to be a help for a better life. Moreover, innovation in technologies can be a good thing but it can be a factor of relationship breakdown. So, I think the progress don't always improve our life. c'est tres bien

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